Editing to Publish

Do you need someone to read over your work?

Have you exhausted all friends and family and you now don't think they will be able to give you an objective view?

Would you like a point of view from someone from the other side of the world?

Is your dialogue working?

Is your first sentence going to catch people's attention quickly enough?

Is the ending great?

Is the sentence structure ok?

Why not drop your story inside here and have someone read your work!

It's FREE!

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/mx9e9m43ljweh11/AAD3I7-VKOT5XSL8As6k1UOxa?dl=0

Read the READ ME file to find out more :)

Commas before a name (or sir, buddy, mate etc) and after a salutation

Long ago I didn't understand the idea of placing a comma before a name, such as: 'What are we doing here, John?'
It's why I tended to easily forget to add it. I still don't really understand why it is needed all the time, however I have come across a few instances where it would be confusing to leave it out. Therefore, I have realised that the comma is somewhat a necessity in these situations.

For example:
'That's a nice pen Dick.'
Be better if you did this:
'That's a nice Pen, Dick.'

I know, Dick, is not a name that is used often these days, but even if the name was Bob or Rod or Phil, it would still sound a little odd.

Check out this post by Rachel:
http://www.grammarerrors.com/punctuation/commas-in-direct-address/